He wondered and cried
A pretty little child
With misery walking side by side
Filled with pride
A pretty little child
Everyone thrashed him, foul-played him
There was so much of pain
Dry was the land, never got watered
For he never saw the rain
His innocent cries
Everyone heard them
Yet no one had any answers to his question
“What is my fault, what wrong have I done?”
Son of a poor man
But with rich thoughts and mind
He was no lesser than others
No different, yet one of his kind
A pretty little child
What kind of rights are these
That deprives a child to live
Wrapped in rags with no place to hide
A pretty little child
A pretty little child
© rahul
16.03.2009
Chaat Vaat Khaalo..!! Creative House
Image - OnFrozenBlog (Crying Lady Liberty)
A pretty little child
With misery walking side by side
Filled with pride
A pretty little child
Everyone thrashed him, foul-played him
There was so much of pain
Dry was the land, never got watered
For he never saw the rain
His innocent cries
Everyone heard them
Yet no one had any answers to his question
“What is my fault, what wrong have I done?”
Son of a poor man
But with rich thoughts and mind
He was no lesser than others
No different, yet one of his kind
A pretty little child
What kind of rights are these
That deprives a child to live
Wrapped in rags with no place to hide
A pretty little child
A pretty little child
© rahul
16.03.2009
Chaat Vaat Khaalo..!! Creative House
Image - OnFrozenBlog (Crying Lady Liberty)
12 comments:
Rahul, a very nice thought. It is quite unfortunate that such bright kids don't stand a chance to live their dreams. They are constantly pushed down by the society.
It is very nice of you to think and express your sympathies towards them. A very thoughtful theme indeed!!! I appreciate it!!!
The expression, be it a poem or a song is strong, but only at a few places. At a few places, they are comparatively weak. Your selection of words let them down at a few places. However, those words do reflect the truth which is very good. So, you could stick to them if you have no better choice.
But, considering your current calibre, I would suggest you to polish this one. No offence.
And, how many minutes did you take to finish this one? Just curious.
Thank You Ajey. I was actually thinking of writing something on this theme from quite sometime. Finally, came up with this one.
I would further polish it, as suggested by You.
And about the minutes I took, umm, maybe around half 'n hour, hehe..
thank you for the read. :)
Yea, polish it and this will be one of your hits, may be.
Half an hour?! Well, I envy such speed. But, remember, it is not about the speed. The quality of work carries more weight.
Yeah! I am still in a fight with my enemy.
I will surely polish it further..
superb
truly reflects the condition of our society. It is a very sorry state of affair that child labor still prevails n these unfortunate children do not get opportunities to explore themselves, their latent talent.
really sad one... nice thoughts .. but can be polished :)
@Nandita
Thank you so much Angel. :) I am glad you liked it
@Pretty me
Thank You. Yea, it can further be polished. I'll keep that in mind :)
Thank you for the read
Hi Raul,
I like it a lot!! Very touching and honest. Thanks for chosing the subject!!
-Alex
Thank You alexandra :)
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