My life runs around me
It surrounds me, and Me
My lies goes beside me
And steal a part of me, and Me
Tell me how're you gonna
Make it alright
Tell me more
Of the things you hide
Tell me more, tell no more
Intoxicated are my dreams
And I don't know what the acid is doing in my veins
Inoculated are my hands, not
And my legs have betrayed me, and Me
Let me know
Am I wasted
Oh let me know
Am I the chosen one
Tell me how're you gonna
Make me tight, again
Tell me more of the words
You never spoke, and never said
Tell me more, tell no more
Hibernating is my skin
It's going pale
And it's stinking
Inflated are my eyes
They're going frail
And not blinking
Let me know
Am I hated
Oh let me know
Am I the chosen one
Tell me how're you gonna
Save me from the beast
Save me now from the bats
They‘re pealing, yes pealing
My skin, and my dreams
© rahul
25.04.2009
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8 comments:
This is really very good!!! I loved the theme!!! I can connect to this but not in every sense. Mind you!!! Hehe.
Just one thing; ""Inoculated are my hands not" - inoculated are my hands, not.
There is a difference there. But, I know what you mean, so, you need to make that change. Just a comma.
Strong lines and like the feelings that should be felt in that condition you're trying to bring across, sort of.
Easily, one of your best works!!! Keep it up!!! I suspect, you're taking time now and are maturing as well. Well done!!! Keep writing!!!
@Brosreview
Thank You Ajey.
I have made the change you pointed out. :)
Yes, taking a lot of time to work on them now.
:) Thank You for the read and appreciation.
I liked the poem . It causes thinking.
@ Dr.John & Mama Zen
Thank You.. :)
Hi Rahul,
Very Good!!! Thought provoking theme and nice flow! Well written!!
-Alex
@ Alexandra
Thank You.. :)
Rahul... that has come out really beautiful...
It's little complicated for me I guess..my poems are very simple and I think I should learn to read songs like yours to get the knack of reading through, below, behind, beside the lines :D
How I wish I could write like you :)
@Viji
Thank you di:)
The fact it, I am still a novice. Learning the art of writing from people like you and AJ.
I wish I could write the way you write :)
Thank you for the appreciation di.
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