Mama, don’t try to wake me
I am sleeping
Mama, don’t try to fix me
I am not broken
I am just down
Deep down under the bed
Fixing up all of my dreams
Lending myself a sound sleep
Mixing them up with some joys
On my knees, I am resting
Look at me I am smiling
Overlook, ignore my eyes
My tears are all fake
They keep lying
So, don’t hear them cry
I have turned off the lights
I am exiting them all
Crossing light of the sorrows
I have entered inside the wall
Overlook, ignore the eyes
They are fake
They are not weeping
So, don’t hear them cry
I have seen thousand suns
They no longer blind me
I have seen thousand moons
They no longer magnetize me
Mama, just ignore the eyes
I have blocked them both
And I have bounded tears in their closet
Now they won’t ever flow
Mama, don’t try to wake me
I am sleeping
While I am weeping
I am resting on my knees
© rahul
22nd April, 2009
Chaat Vaat Khaalo..!! Creative House
Image - Claude Monet (Subject to Copyright)
8 comments:
The last para is the best :)
Loved your blog! :D
Happy Blogging!
@Cursed♪♫
Thank You.. :)
I am glad you liked my blog.
"Fixing up all of my dreams
Lending myself a sound sleep
Mixing them up with some joys
On my knees, I am resting"
loved these lines.. it has come out very well...
while in the first stanza, I feel that "I am sleeping", "I am not broken", "I am just down", can be merged to the feel of their previous line, it would sound better... just my thoughts...
the theme is as good as ever and you succeeded in what you set to achieve.
I am not sure if what i suggest would sound good in a song though it would give a better rhyme for a poem.
Kudos to you Rahul... u never seize to amaze me.
@ Viji
Thank You for the suggestions. I shall do that. :)
Thank You..!!
Thanks for linking my blog mate.
Cheers!
@Sujoy
It was a pleasure buddy
the first time I read it, I fell in love with it :P
Specially that Mimoh wala post..
You are doing a great job..Keep blogging
This is neat Rahul!!! I like the message here!!! You could use a more forgiving word than "magnetize", I reckon. Keep at it!!!
Thank You Ajey. I shall do that :)
Thank you for the read.
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