Do I look like another?
Do I look like the same?
Do I speak a different language?
Do I live without offering a prayer?
I can be white
I can be black
I may be an answer
I may be a question
I may live in a palace
I may live in a shack
Tell me how it matters
If I wear a different dress
Tell me how it matters
If I do it a different way
One love, one place
We all belong here
One night, one day a time
Let’s see the things for clear
I can be short
I can be tall
I maybe walking
Or, I may crawl
I may carve the words
Or, I may let them scrawl
Tell me how it matters
If I am wiser or you
Tell me how it matters
If the sky is grey or blue
One love, one place
We all belong here
One night, one day a time
Let’s see the things for clear
© rahul
Co-Editor - Praveer
18.03.2009
Image - sflifeandjustice.org
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22 comments:
A thought-provoking theme here... again!!! But, you might want to give this one a thorough read and wash as a few lines are wrongly written. For instance:
"Do I live without a pray? "
"I maybe be black"
and so on...
All the best!!!
I will do that.
Thank You for the read Ajey
Rahul,
Saadi has posted a new song revolving around the same theme as this post. Kindly have a read. It's quite rarely, you find two song writers releasing a song based on similar themes at once.
Cheers!!!
Mmmm Im finding this hard, reading lyrics and having no music..
Perhaps Bros is not correct?, Id have to hear it though...x
A'jay,
Firstly, Thank you for reading. Well, about hearing this, I'll have to get a tune for this first. Coz to be true, I have none as of now.
Once I get a complimenting tune, I'll definitely work it out. :)
@A'Jay - I think this is a poem A'Jay. Isn't it Rahul?
Yes Bros, it is a poem. :)
Rahul, love the photograph you've added. Suits your poem very well. Even better, it adds to the emotion to your words. Good work!!!
Thank you Ajey. Yes, I purposely chose this image. :)
Rahul, does your editor Praveer have a blog of his own? I mean, does he write songs as well?
He does have a blog, but rarely posts on it.
I just take his suggestions on the grammatical errors, as I am very bad with the correct usage of words. :)
Oh okay. Well, you both are doing wonders here. Keep it up!!!
Thank You Ajey. Btw, I have further changed some words, as pointed by you. :)
Nice!!! It is a level better now!!! This line: "Do I live without offering a pray?"
You could change it to, Do I live without praying? OR Do I live without offering a prayer?
Just my thoughts on correction. I am still keeping the idea and line the same. No offence.
Okay, I have done that :)
Yea, seems better now!!! What do you think? And, yea, why is the font smaller in the last verse? Did you notice? Something wrong with blogger?!
Yea, happens sometimes. Blogger behaves in a weird way.
It's much better now
"Do I live without a pray?" may not be technically correct, but the style is characteristic of your writing and you should stick to it.
Good luck with your poetry!
I shall keep that in mind.
Thank you for the read Ash. :)
another good one
Hi Raul,
Despite the discussion regarding correctness of the language I love the poem and the subject of it. I'm sure it will end up great. Very moving!!
-Alex
Ah, I noticed the changes Rahul. Lucky that I stopped by. It is getting better and better. Keep at it!!!
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